Hybrid Method

I am apprehensive about sharing my essay because I've never really been comfortable about sharing my writing. This is mainly because I fear I will be judged. Not openly of course but I know people will be thinking things. This is good since their critiques will help me improve my essay, but it stills makes me nervous if my writing is bad. If my writing is good though, I feel like I'm showing off and it may put other people down about their essays. I feel that would happen to me if someone had a great essay, i would feel bad about my essay not being as good. The best thing that could happen i suppose is people would give me great advice and I go to become the greatest writer ever. The worste possible scenario, however, is that my writing will be so horrible everyone will hate me.

The Cold Makes Me Want to...

The cold makes me want to dress warm, mostly because I dont like being cold. Also I want to build an igloo in the snow and take a nap in it. And when people attack my snow home I would make a snow fortress and attack them and then it would be a super cool snowball fight. And then when I beat them, I would be merciful and not destroy their snow fort, but join our forts together to make a super awesome one. And then we would make snow angels, but thats very cold so I would go inside and eat something warm. Something like chilli. After that I would take a nap. Unless of course, I wasnt tired. In that case, I would probably eat some more or go to school depending on what day it is. The cold makes me want to do these things.

Writing Comments

I found my comments to be helpful and ensightful. There were some encouraging comments as well as some that point out my weaknesses so I am able to improve one those. I had the most difficulty with composing topic sentences. They werent specific enough, so that resulted in my body paragraphs straying off topic a little bit. In past essays I also had trouble making my essay in MLA format, but thats just something you have to memorize and I'm pretty sure I've got it down. Another comment provided me with a tip on chooseing my words more wisely, as to make my argument stronger. Simply, avoid sounding passive.
My strengths I think were the ideas I had were very strong and realated to the topic. asdfjkl;ufyv

The Awakening

To start, I would just like to say that I would not recommend this to a friend for the mere sake of reading, but I might however recommend it for educational purposes. The book marks an important age in womens' rights and their self-discovery. It does this, in a very drab and slow process though. I found this aspect of it difficult to read and stay focused, but i did get it done.
The author tells the story of womens' advancement in society through one woman's life, which I did enjoy. I found that to be preferrable over a non-fiction informative novel of womans' role in society. This woman's name is Edna and the reader follows her through her journey of self-discovery. It's not until the end when Edna finally has an awakening. She sets an example for women everywhere in her decisions and actions, and although I don't agree with all of them, I admire her for that. I found her progression through the novel quite interesting seeing as she changed so much from the beginning, going from a conformist to a non-conformist and also becoming independent and making her own decision for the first time. That was really the point of the novel, and I think the author did a good job of expressing this. It wasnt an easy read, or a good read for all that matter, but it was important.

Chapters whatever to such and such

I dunno about these chapters man... To begin, I don't like how it went from Jurgis' life to to this strong argument on socialism so quickly and obviously; not only am I left unsatisfied on what is going on with Jurgis and his family, but also the book has gotten quite boring. Socialism seems to be a pretty good idea, but then again, the author is only providing us with all the good aspects of Socialism, so i'm not really able to see a downside to it. I'm happy for Jurgis and Elzbeita for discovering it though. Jurgis seems to be pretty excited about it and since then he has been able voice his mind in meetings. Since Jurgis found Socialism, Jurgis' life has been going good even though he is living in a mainly Capitalistic society where his neighbors go hungry his family dies. This argument is the strongest of all because it goes beyond mere facts and shows the readers an example of a real life situation where everything that can go wrong, does.

The Jungle Chapters 27 & 28

In chapter 27 the major event is that Jurgis is reunited with Marija. He meets an old friend on the street while begging, and she tells Jurgis where Marija is living downtown. I think that this chance is too small to be coincedence and that its great! It really makes me happy when Jurgis decides to go visit her. Even though his main reason is probably because he needs a home, this action shows a little bit more of the old Jurgis, and I like that hes coming through. Too bad Marija had to resort to becoming a whore to help feed Elbeata and her kids, but sometimes hard times have to resort to that, and since Marija is sending money back, I think it was a wise decision. They all get arrested by the police, but I thought this was odd because later in the day they just continue what they were doing, which made no sense.Marija is sort of trapped there now, but isnt everyone in packing town really?
The argument for Socialism is coming on strong now, as can be seen when Jurgis goes to this meeting thing where a man preaches about all the crime and swindles, and all the flaws in a Capitalistic society. Really simply, he was talking about how "the man" was holding them all down. Less simply however, he speaks about how the laborers do the work, and the rich prosper from it and keep us down and pretty much everything that has happened wrong in Jurgis' life since he came to America. Jurgis agrees and is moved by this. That's 'bout it.

The Jungle Chapter 26

At the beginning of the chapter, Jurgis, for the most part, gives up his life of crime in order to "lay low" for awhile. He has a job as a pig skinner and is getting paid well; He's getting paid 3 dollars a day! I think this is pretty swell. He may have been making alot as a criminal, but now hes earning money without breaking the law. Either decision would have been fine, perhaps open for discussion maybe?
The strike by the union really worked well for Jurgis, because there were more job openings and they were paying more to loyal workers. This allows Jurgis to become a foreman in the packing plant. This is really good for him, which is sort of the first time he has advanced in society. The strike threatens to end this, but doesnt which was a great releif.
Also, he has people to watch his back now for the first time since he left his family. Mike Scully and his people are watching out for him. When Jurgis lands in prison again one of his fellows takes $300 of his money, but at least he gets him out of jail by persuading the judge that he's a good man.
Jurgis lands in jail for this third time because he beats Connor again. Sinclair said Jurgis was filled with blind rage, and I was too! I was hoping that Jurgis would jump at him and beat him up, and i was glad that he did. Connor was to blame for Ona's death, and Connor deserved it and more for that i beleive. I feel the same emotions that Jurgis does when he discovers Connor is a friend of Scully, because I too wanted Connor to get beat up, but then i regreted it afterwards as Jurgis did.
Things arent going great yet, but at least its not tragedy after tragedy, so thats pretty cool. Ready to present... Yea... :D